Yesterday I saw a piece of short writing for me , it was my friend . I was crying when I read it . And I have much thoughts and feelings .
       I think I am a very happy girl in everyone's eyes all the way . But I am not , I am a extreme , obstinate and weak girl in fact . I thought only myself knew this . But now , I know I am not the only one , I have some best friends .
       My friend told me :" I wish you are happy !"
       Yes , I am happy ,my life is full of  happiness !
       Friends , you are my best friends for ever . I wish you happy.
       各位朋友们,你们要幸福,看着你们幸福是我最大的快乐!

[ 本帖最后由 潇钰尔 于 2007-8-4 17:38 编辑 ]

那个  斑竹  我没违反版规吧  [smilies6]
上面那个也没什么大的语法错误吧[smilies2]

[ 本帖最后由 潇钰尔 于 2007-8-4 15:40 编辑 ]

这个...谢谢你的积极参与哈.其实,有一点小错误吧...要么我稍微帮你改一下?by the way,I'm impressed by your words...
Yesterday I saw a piece of short writing for me , it(was) my friend wrote(这个词去掉好了) . I was crying when I reading(read) it . And I have much thought(s) and feelings .
       I think I am a very happy girl in everyone's eyes all the way . But I am not , I am a extreme , obstinate and weak girl in fact . I thought know this only myself (这句话稍微改下I thought only myself knew this.). But now , I know I am not (the) only one , I have some best friends .
       My friend told me :" I wish to(to去掉拉) you are happy !"
       Yes , I am happy ,my life is (加个full of)happiness !
       Friends , you are my best friends for ever . I wish you (happy?).
这个,我个人的一些意见,参考一下咯

谢谢斑竹
那个　我平时就丢三落四的　[smilies2]
真不好意思　给你添麻烦了　
再次感谢　外加崇拜　斑竹的英语好好哦[smilies22]

..............偶自认为是马马虎虎类型...

[smilies1] 楼主好厉害!!!
再回过头看看自己...[smilies24] [smilies27] ....英语啊...
好,决定了,我要好好学英语!!!(其实某只fellow是为了看HP的英文同人文的!!!..好多同人文都是外国佬写的..可恨啊!!看八懂!!!!![smilies18]

是啊　我也有这种想法　
严重拥抱一下楼上的亲[smilies8]

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原帖由 fellow 于 2007-8-4 19:54 发表
楼主好厉害!!!
再回过头看看自己...  ....英语啊...
好,决定了,我要好好学英语!!!(其实某只fellow是为了看HP的英文同人文的!!!..好多同人文都是外国佬写的..可恨啊!!看八懂!!!!!

恩...MS偶还从没去过外国的HP论坛...能推荐几个吗?[smilies6]